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Rebekah Jensen's avatar

Why I Don’t Like Liquid Smoke

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I don’t remember what tools we used

or if I wore gloves or if my skin

turned black.

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I don’t remember coughing or stumbling

or needing to later trash my

clothes and shoes.

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I don’t remember how many of us

there were. I picture a regatta

of letterman jackets (red-white-blue)

sailing crisply over the charcoal

but surely that’s a fiction – who would

bring such a prize to the mines?

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Jackie found the wedding ring: that’s

one thing I recall.

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The other is the smell of what

my friend’s house became,

eaten down to its acrid bones

eaten down to its very ghost

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who slumped in the rubble and

watched us work, and now

haunts my nose.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I love the sharp surprise of the final line and the sad, soot-stained vividness of the images that precede it. Beautiful!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

I like this Rebekah! It is a creative description of the work of fire fighters and the small joys that may come even in the midst of larger tragedies. A splendid and moving poem!

Jim Sanders's avatar

I checked last posting to make sure I didn’t already share this.

I didn’t but if mistaken, forgive me for getting memory challenged.

Tree branch fractals are singing a dirge

This morning in Tucson

Accompanied by an orchestra

Of wind chimes

Singing on the windy breath

Of the earth’s lungs

Bereaving the Smokey deaths

Of California trees and homes

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Beautiful and sad - like a dirge. “Singing on the windy breath / of the earths lungs / bereaving the smoky deaths / of California trees and homes.” Wow, those lines make me ache.

Jim Sanders's avatar

Well, you asked us to write and maybe not fully on point but I saw a connection. Are you well into your second hundred?

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I've only written maybe 5 or so poems this year, but I think I managed 180+ last year, so I'm not too worried about the numbers right now!

Jim Sanders's avatar

So what has been your personal evolution since you started writing? How would you put it into a poem?

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I appreciate this poem so much and the invitation to sit for a moment in the grief and horror that so many are experiencing.

Carole Roseland's avatar

I haven’t been able to update, and now there are new fires. I’m just praying for everyone today, especially because the winds have picked up again and the two major fires are only partially contained.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I'm praying with you!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you Carole, for sharing this wonderful poem and article abojut the terrible devestation of the fires in California.

Chuck's avatar

fire in her eyes.....

ice in her veins.....

flame in my heart.....

chill in the air.

..happy anniversary, dear one..

Lisa Jensen's avatar

This is so sweet! Happy anniversary to you and your dear one!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Very nice, Chuck! Happy Anniversary!

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Fire

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There was always a story floating around

about two kids who started a fire in the fields

that stretched beyond a school, or a store

or someone’s pretty house. Somehow, those two

found matches or a lighter or a candelabra

and lit them up in the dry grass.

And we all know the rest.

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We have spent summers stuck inside

because the forest fire air was so bad

and flakes of ash floated down on our way to the car.

We have been in a heat dome that covered the city

huddled in the attic where the only air conditioner blew

a stale coolness, toddlers sick and panting.

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We have stared into campfires,

blown out candles and had hot wax

push across small hands, crying out.

But nothing like this hell right now.

Why do I get to keep my home?

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Ohhhhh what a punch-to-the-gut of an ending! This poem pulled me in with a sort of innocence, like it was just an easy read, and then it just built and built . . . like a harmless spark growing to a wildfire.

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you for providing an opportunity to face the fires in a poem. I have a friend who lost everything in them and it’s hard to think about much else.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I'm so sorry to hear about your friend. I keep thinking about how many losses are stacked on top of each other - home, safety, the sense of being wrapped in memories, community, livelihood . . . the list just goes on and on. I'll be thinking of your friend, too.

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you, Lisa. Yes, the losses feel endless.

Mark Shields's avatar

"Some say the world will end in Fire,

- some say in Ice.

From what I've tasted of desire

I hold with those who favor Fire.

But if it had to perish twice,

I think that for destruction, Ice

is also great and would suffice." - Frost

Love that poem! (hope I've recalled it correctly!)

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Such a great poem!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Here's a short one that begain with a slip and a fall.

Fire and Ice

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In the span of a breath, it happens,

flat on my back and rocked into haziness;

The ice falls so quick, so fleeting,

the pain and consequences so lasting.

Inside the fire warms the house,

takes the chill from my bones,

makes winter dreamlike for a time.

Two elements meeting in the middle,

spark of creation coming home,

a tale forever told.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Ohhhh ouch! Are you alright, Larry?? Two beloved senior members of my family have taken significant falls in the last week or so. One got lucky, and one didn’t. I am hoping luck was with you, friend, and that you’ve suffered nothing worse than bruises! Clearly, your creativity is still fully intact “The ice falls so quick, so fleeting,

the pain and consequences so lasting.” Such beautiful, insightful, and painful lines.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

All good Lisa! I was recalling falls of the past, as we got our first real snowfall and slippery season is in full gear here. Prayers and good heart for your elders who have fallen recently. May healing be strong! Thank you for you!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you, Larry! And I'm so relieved to hear this wasn't something recent and acute . . . I was worried about you!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you for worrying! I expect I will not get through the winter without a fall, and I''ll ask for prayers when the next one comes!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

I love this Lisa, and the wonderful description of the creative proess that brought it to life. This middle stanza is just magnificient!

"I see gravity

bend with the branches.

Icicles curve,

curl like talons,

scratch the rising ground."

I marvel every time at the wonderful way you create and find the perfect words, and your generosity in sharing with us. Thank you!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

And I marvel that people actually take the time to read my poems! Your presence here is such a gift. ❤️

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

You are the honey bee of substack!!!!

LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

Lovely poem. And I have to keep getting out of my own way when writing again and again and again.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I’m glad it isn’t just me! By the way, your chapbook came in the mail a few days ago. I haven’t started reading yet but am really looking forward to doing so!

LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

Let me know what you think. Thank you so much for buying it!

Brian Funke's avatar

Beautiful beautiful piece!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, Brian! 💕

Lisa Andradez's avatar

I love your poem Lisa, and thank you for sharing Robert Frost's poem too, I hadn't read that before

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you and you’re welcome! ❤️

Mark Shields's avatar

The Ice Storm of January 1967 - my first week in Sycamore Indiana as a brand new 13 yo, fresh to the glazed cornfields and shattered trees from a very different Princeton NJ -

"In the trees, glass[es] clinking, limbs toasting to better days. I lie beneath them, brave the shatter of tumbling flutes." Love this evocation (for me) of a life changing, Lisa.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

“Fresh to the glazed cornfields and shattered trees” - what a line!

Mark Shields's avatar

You're a person of many talents, Lisa. Appreciate those things you do that are rippling, like an antidote, through our world.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

What a generous thing to say, Mark! Thank you. We're all casting ripples.

Weston Parker's avatar

Dandy poem, thanks

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Dandy is such a great word!

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Hello everyone - I have missed reading all of your words. I'm trying to ease back into things....fire and ice totally describes my emotions of the last few months.

I haven't seen the sunrise in more days than I can count;

The cold and ice have bound me to my bed.

Driving toward the east now, I pass fields covered in white;

The pinkish red horizon clears my head.

Bare branches silhouetted against the eastern sky,

The sun a promise of a warmer day.

Will I feel as hot as fire today or as frozen as ice?

I wonder so but really cannot say.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Karri!!!!!! Seeing you here makes me so happy, but oh, I’m so sorry to hear that you’re in such a fiery and icy season of late. Your poem is beautiful. “The pinkish red horizon clears my head” - I can so easily relate to that . . . and to the reality that the clearing (like each cloud) is temporary.

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Oh my goodness. This poem grabbed me from the beginning. The pictures are exquisite too.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much! Ohhhhh and I see you’ve left a poem of your own here, too. Going to read now . . .

adriana's avatar

where do i go again

when the distance between this cold

vein of hopelessness

so is blue?

inside myself, the threads hold

heat better than any sun

out there.

i want to stay inside myself,

i love you.