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Mark Shields's avatar

So!

Spending a week with my brother - now a grateful cyborg - 2 days ago the neurologist at the University hospital turned up the DBS amperage 0.2 mA, substantially upgrading his Parkinson’s QoL with a God’s one finger Bluetooth button touch.

The resulting tiny increment in endogenous dopamine changed his lived experience from nauseous incapacity to joyful reconnection with life and love, a walk in the sun, laughter over cards, until next increment is necessary, until last mA of life is lived and spent.

An art to letting go, and

an art to holding on.

Love what you do!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I'm happy to hear your brother is experiencing some relief and reconnection with life! Illness isn't for the weak, is it? And you put this so beautiful - "an art to letting go, and an art to holding on." Yes! Thank you, Mark.

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Thank you Lisa!

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

Snap and rustle from above

did not make me look, thank god,

and a second later limb found

hull of head, thudding dully in my ears

before bouncing groundward to join

the crowd of tree leavings past,

indistinguishable and plausibly alibied

(“Who, me? I was just lying here!”).

.

I clutched my skull and wobbled

out of the fall zone, recalling

yesterday’s gallery exhibit

in which an artist twice concussed

displayed the contents of a brain

not only healed, but richly forested,

so branched and birdy it was as if

there had been no taming cuts—

never a desk job, never a rut—

all because she had taken up painting.

.

Though I sustained no lasting damage,

I vowed then to mix it up:

sample new routes, say yes,

wander after distant yellow.

Walking home, I paid my respects

to a scoliotic pine, its bole

nearly genuflecting, its arms up

in praise. Maybe I can be

that kind of congregant.

Maybe I can be alive.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

How did I not know you almost got murdered by a tree limb!!?? I feel so out of the loop. I love where you take this experience/story, though. The image of a brain "so branched and birdy" is delightful, and I love your ending - "Maybe I can be that kind of congregant. Maybe I can be alive."

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is splendid, Rebekah! One, I am glad you are okay. Two, we need to get you a walking helmet! I love ❤️ the way you embody the tree and limbs with such vivid imagery, and the lovely conclusion to which you arrive at the end. And the second stanza about the twice concussed painter. As someone who took 15 months a few years ago to almost fully recover from a conversation adding, her experience and seeing a positive to the altered brain 🧠 is really helpful to me. Thank you for being a walking explorer of a poet!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

In a brief moment of quiet, this one appeared...

^

It was that moment,

an inescapable vision of a dream

weaving into a nightmare,

that my grip began to loosen,

the debris of expectations and desires,

the soft edges turned hard and cold,

sifting away like ashes in the wind.

It was that moment,

In the traumatic act of letting go,

My heart began to heal.

My life able to be lived once more,

My song finally able to be sung.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

This is beautiful, Larry! I just loved "the debris of expectations" and then the seeming paradox of "in the traumatic act of letting go, my heart began to heal." It really is like that, isn't it? Letting go can feel so traumatic and painful and barely survivable . . . and then on the other side is this healing and peace and possibility.

Keith Aron's avatar

This one really knocked my inner psychopomp's socks off. Really beautiful, friend. And I'd love to play telephone tag poets again. 😃

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you, and I'm so glad you're in on the telephone game! Also, I had to look up the word "psychopomp" and am so glad I did.

Jim Sanders's avatar

Letting Go of the Past

I gladly held your hand

As you grew more sensitive

To your own interior

And slowly healed

From the undulating waves and eddies

With cross currents of red, blue, and green

Of thoughts, feeling and emotions

Creating such turmoil and chaos

That you had no space for me

And a single tear

Could not relieve the bleaching

Of my spirit

To find peace and serenity in the moment

I no longer forsake the peace

Arising from natural beauty and calm

That stills my heart and cleanses my soul

I am no longer succumbing

To the daily pennies of order and frugality

No longer swimming in the turmoil of past memories

As I travel to local and distant landscapes

Of nature, knowledge and the knowing spirit

I have let you go

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Oooooh "daily pennies of order and frugality" got me, too! What a poem, Jim! I was so pulled in by the opening three lines, too, and the momentum never let up.

Jim Sanders's avatar

Lisa,

I loved your poem and love watching your evolution as a poet. I’m learning from you as you learn, though I’m not really a poet but someone whose mind just experiences solar flares of words.

There are many poets on Substack who talk about different poetic forms and styles and I haven’t a clue what they are talking about. That is OK with me but still enjoy following you and others as your poems often is the booster rocket into a philosophic thought atmosphere and often an examination of my mortal coil.

So thank you.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Solar flares of words! 🧡 Is there something better than that? Thank you for your kind words, Jim. To be honest, I don't know much about poetry or different poetic forms either. I'm still learning, and slowly. Mostly I'm having too much fun with my own solar flares of words to worry about squeezing them into different forms. But it's on my bucket list to work on that at some point. I appreciate your thoughts and words and perspective so much!

Jim Sanders's avatar

Lisa,

Congratulations. I see one of your poems was selected by Maya Popa.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thanks, Jim! Definitely feels like an honor.

Jim Sanders's avatar

It is an honor.

Jim Sanders's avatar

It feels like an honor because IT IS AN HONOR.

🙏🏻😍☺️🥰😎👍

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

What a beautiful ode to letting go. You capture the wave and breadth of emotions so well, and make the personal universal in your framing and lyrical poem!

Emily Kaminsky's avatar

Beautiful - the daily pennies of order and frugality... I paused there in the best way possible. Thank you for showing us how letting go in poetic form is done.

Jim Sanders's avatar

Thank you. I’m humbled that you like it.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is really lovely Lisa. I love ❤️ the repeated ending: “your life depends/on the volume of/your letting go.” That is a whole poem all by itself! And that delicate balance of letting go and holding on, and when to do which. 😀

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, friend!

Joe (Danger) T Poet, Esq. IV's avatar

I really like this poem. This was the first time I have listened to one which I really enjoyed because I could hear the rhythm that you heard when you wrote it.

The sound quality is good. What did you record it on? Was it right in the app or did you record it separately and then add it

I think it’s some thing I wanna start doing as well because it really makes a difference

You read very well also. A long time ago I used to run a poetry open mic and a solid delivery in your own voice matters.

Really great

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, Joe! I also really enjoy hearing poems read aloud. I just used the built-in recording app on my iPhone and then uploaded it to Substack - easy peasy.

Joe (Danger) T Poet, Esq. IV's avatar

Awesome. Thank you.

Fotini Masika's avatar

I'll be waiting by the telephone :)

And by the way, I loved your poem!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Oh yay! I’ll add you to the list. And thank you, dear.❤️

Ava Larkspur's avatar

Hello, I would like to play the poem telephone game!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Wonderful! I've got you on the list!

Emily Kaminsky's avatar

Lisa, the form of this poem felt like a passing of a baton from one section to the next, kind of like a chain poem taking words from the previous stanza to start the next... Which felt metaphorically like what happens when our cells slough off and get picked up and recycled by the universe (as you say). I'd love to participate in the telephone poetry game. Thank you!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much for your thoughtful reflection on the poem, Emily! And I'm so glad you're in on the telephone game - I've added you to the list!

Rebecca C.'s avatar

Oh, Lisa.... wait 'til we talk on Monday....

Lisa Jensen's avatar

❤️💔❤️

Andrea Canavan's avatar

Count me in for the telephone game. How neat! Thank you!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Yippee! You're on the list!

Debbi's avatar

❤️🩷

Loralee Clark's avatar

Oooh! The telephone game sounds like fun! Count me in, please.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Yay! I've got you on the list!

Jodi Proctor's avatar

I would love to play this if I’m not too late! Love the prompt as well.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Not too late! I’ll add you to the list.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Count me in for telephone poetry, Lisa!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Yippeeee!!! On the list.