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Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

This is one I wrote this week in a similar downtime. I was up and dressed for the day and waiting on my mom so I decided to go outside to the public balcony with a book and journal. I shared it as a part of a larger entry yesterday.

Morning at the Crescent

..

The storm has passed but a steady light rain falls.

While the birds resume their morning gossip,

A coolish breeze belies the date on the calendar,

And the misty clouds are so low that heaven and earth meet,

On this rainy summer morning.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I love how you pull me right into the moment with you! This is lovely.

Claire Adderholt's avatar

that's really atmospheric, it takes me to your world with the words

Keith Aron's avatar

"and the misty clouds are so low that heaven and earth meet" - gorgeous line, and what a vivid scene you paint with your words, Karri.

Chuck's avatar

Resuming their gossip. 🙂👏

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

This is beautiful, Karri. I feel like I'm there.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

I love this Karri! It is so evocative, vivid and descriptive! I do love “while the birds resume their morning gossip”. These morning sentries!

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

I kind of cheated here and played both with the "unexpected pocket of time" theme (sitting on the road) and the "you" prompt.

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When my chatter box won't run

I do weird things like

hide from my neighbors.

Granted, this is the sticks:

a place where hiding can feel

like a plausible extension of

not trespassing and

almost neighborly.

.

The morning I sat down on the road

to avoid overtaking you

on our regrettably coincident walks,

a chickadee popped out to say hi

without even parting the curtains.

.

He was born yesterday

and is already an ambassador.

I was born droves of birds ago

and am finally a hermit.

.

We are both in the right place,

this many-treed patch

where he can share the feeder

to his heart’s content

and I can wish you well

from a distance.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I don't think you cheated - I think you deserve extra credit! And what a lovely poem. "I was born droves of birds ago / and am finally a hermit." So many beautiful lines, but those might be my favorite.

Chuck's avatar

I think not necessarily weird

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

Haha, I'm glad you get me, Chuck!

Chuck's avatar

I think I toned my "hiding" skill the most at church.

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

"I was born droves of birds ago and am finally a hermit" is so perfect. I love this.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

I live this Rebekah, and can certainly relate. The last stanza is superb and connects the beginning and end so nicely.

Keith Aron's avatar

What a lovely, peaceful poem, Lisa. I love the landing of you in your comfortable darkness, dappled in maple-leaf light.

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Those empty pockets

of time are not what gets

top billing when looking

back over a day.

Yet those small quiet spaces

are the exact places

where emotional sediment

comes to settle.

All those traces

of displaced feelings

collecting in the corners,

like so much lint that,

left untended,

might well start

a fire.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Ohhh, I love how the vibe of this poem feels sort of calm and reflective and then all of a sudden, it lights on fire at the end . . . just like those displaced feelings, hiding with matches in the corner.

Keith Aron's avatar

Thanks, friend :))

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

And there are fires which need to be started; controlled burns if you will! We need a spark to light those fires and get us going. Thanks for the inspiration 😘

Keith Aron's avatar

Oh, the idea of a controlled burn...yes! That can be part of the "tending to!"

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Well judging by events of today there are sparks. Lo.

Keith Aron's avatar

There is never a shortage of sparks. Ever!

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

I'm rereading a book right now which describes magic dust in the same way I'm picturing your "emotional sediment" and I just love this imagery.

Keith Aron's avatar

Thanks, A. And I love the imagery of magic dust...emotional sediment can be magical dust (can be)!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Ah, Keith, another gem! "Where emotional sediment/comes to settle." Wow, that is wonderful. I love the movement of your poem, and the sparkling ending, with sparks and possibility of fire. What a writer you are!

Keith Aron's avatar

Thanks, Larry - as always, grateful for your kind and affirming feedback :))

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

I love this poem and how you came to it. I have found myself in a similar pocket and wrote about how it makes me uncomfortable. 🤣 I don't know if it's finished yet, but I'm trying not to overthink it.

My husband and children have a habit of slipping away unannounced, as a way of giving me space,

which is such a rarity that I should really enjoy it more, but I can't help feeling like something has been stolen from me - a goodbye, maybe,

or the possibility of spending these moments alone more intentionally.

I need a warning.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I love the simplicity of the ending - "I need a warning," and I can totally relate to the sentiment. A warning and also a schedule of when the quiet will end again, so I know what's possible in that time. Is this just a go-to-the-bathroom-uninterrupted pause, or should I brew myself a cup of coffee and work on my novel?

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Yes! The opportunity to plan what to do with one’s time!

Keith Aron's avatar

oh wow, the idea of having a goodbye stolen from you really landed. I feel that, deeply. And the last line really packed a punch. The poem itself really expresses so well the gap that can exist between intent and impact.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

My partner would agree with you 100%, A. It is amazing how our mutual good intentions stumble on the field of our personalities, stylistic tendencies and idiosyncrasies. I am always learning how to intentionally communicate; one day I’ll get there!

Chuck's avatar

Ticking away the moments

that make up a dull day.

It's the time of the season

to fritter and waste the hours

in an offhand way.

But

Tiiiiii-ahhhhiii-eee-uummmm

is on my side.

Yes it is.

I wonder if jagger still thinks that.

Does anybody really know?

The times they are a changin'.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Without fail, there is always some line in your poems that catches me completely by surprise and puts a big smile on my face. "Tiiiiii-ahhhhiii-eee-uummmm" is certainly such a line!

Chuck's avatar

🙂

Was in the middle of some weepy "life sucks when you get old" thing when Pink Floyd came on the radio.

Lisa Andradez's avatar

"My comfortable darkness" what a line.... I love it

Your poem is beautiful, thanks for sharing...

I wrote this as I listened to the local church bells ringing for half an hour as I relaxed this afternoon

Church bells ring, are you listening?

Church bells

Clanging loundly

Ringing noisily

Out of tune

For what purpose?

I sit uncomfortably

the tintinnabulation of the bells

disturbing my peace

deafening reminders

of a God long abandoned

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you., Lisa! And what a treat to read your poem . . . tintinnabulation is such an incredible word. And "deafening reminders / of a God long abandoned" is a beautiful and intriguing ending.

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

I've had similar thoughts about local church bells.

Chuck's avatar

Maybe just it's the bells themselves, the joy in unleashing their sound for a little while?

Claire Adderholt's avatar

<3 lovely

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

“Living inside a poem”. What a wonderful way to describe life! And so glad you got some unexpected time.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, Karri!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Late moring Sunday offering after church:

Small Spaces

^

Heat wave finally broken,

leaving in the dark of night,

with a subtle reminder on the morning dew

‘I’ll be back.”

Bellwether bible of the times.

^

My bicycle glides along Ocean Road,

sweet promise of a summer breeze,

mind rolling like the revolution of the wheels

scrolling through the lines of long ago:

“cast your seasons to the wind

and hold me dear, hold me dear.”

The slender beauty of the small moments,

micro raptures of the spirit:

Reegan’s bright smile piercing every shadow,

Alexia’s vision of a future on the edge of adulthood,

Dan's discovery of love once again.

^

Stories of hope, stories and heart

shared in small spaces every day.

Brown eyed boy on ocean jetty

proclaiming “I am a whale.”

Joyful screams of hot skin touching icy waters

sun drenched elder waking from sacred sand nap

to the words “I love you.”

^

Let us each be the lights to a brighter day.

Coolness in the heat waves;

warmth in the stubborn occupation of winter,

bridges of grace in times in between,

sparks of light creeping into the despair,

singing an ancient tune,

“you are not alone.”

Lisa Jensen's avatar

"Micro raptures of the spirit" - I adore this description! And what a lovely hug of a landing - "you are not alone." Thank you for this beautiful poem, Larry.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you for reading and commenting, Lisa!

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

Beautiful, Larry. That last stanza is especially comforting to me.

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you A. Looking for bridges of hope in the times!

Ronald Lanham's avatar

I'am not poetically inclined but nice photo of you!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is a delightful poem and prompt to see on a lovely Saturday! I like that you had the gift of some found time yesterday, and you had the wisdom to fill it with what came in the moment. The gift of sleep for your son and the gift of small moment time for you. I like that phrase “my comfortable darkness!” And that the beginnings of this sweet poem started with a morning breeze. You are a morning breeze to us, your merry band of poets, every prompt and poem you share!

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, Larry!

Danielle ⛈️'s avatar

You had "the experience," where you realize your life is a living poem and you are living it. Gorgeous! 🥰

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you, Danielle! That's definitely how life feels to me - at least most days.

Danielle ⛈️'s avatar

That's lovely! Thanks for sharing it with us. XO

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much for sharing this! I feel like that simple phrase, spoken to yourself - "I have time" - has such incredible power. It's a door opener, a muscle relaxer, a permission giver. I'm so glad you shared your experience!

Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is great! Bravo to you for sitting in on yoga’.