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Chuck's avatar

click click click from my car starter.

a 3AM phone ring

bone as it snaps.

mysterious attic footfalls.

bedroom crickets.

a "...cancer...." whisper.

That loud, still, screaming silence after a last breath.

...sounds that suck...

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Bone as it snaps!

Keith Aron's avatar

This is a powerful list...feeling it. The yin to Julie Andrews yang ("My Favorite Things" in the Sound of Music).

Debbie's avatar

Woof! You nailed it Chuck!

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

Ooooh, this one gives me chills, Chuck.

Chuck's avatar

Maybe you have heard one or two?

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

One or two, yes. Fortunately no mysterious attic footfalls yet, though! ;)

Debbie's avatar

I wanted a quiet moment at the beach.

What I got was:

Wind in my ears

Water crashing on the rocks

Sawing noises from a nearby house construction site

Lawn tractor in the distance

Car locks beeping

Children chattering

Birds chirping and singing

A little dog barking

A car radio playing

My own thoughts louder than the cacophony of external distractions

I gave up.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Ugh I have lived such moments! “Getting away” only to find that everything has gone with you. Thank you for sharing this delightful poem, Debbie!

Chuck's avatar

We went to outer banks one year the same week that the township decided it was time to do all-nite sand dredging right in front of our oceanfront rental. Was wondering why the rent was so cheep.

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Yes! So much for the quiet moment!

Keith Aron's avatar

So relatable...especially "my own thoughts louder than the cacophony of external distractions."

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

This is the worst kind of day for me. Expecting quiet only to be inundated with unexpected noise and interruptions. Ugh.

B W Bruso's avatar

Hi Lisa! Great poem! Living on a working farm sure brings it joyous noise. I loved the prompt too. This was in my ears all afternoon —

Turn Over

If they crank that engine

one more time it’ll crack.

I expect tractors, songbirds,

perhaps even the squeal of foxes.

Back behind the barn

my neighbor and his son

wrangle with their stubborn

early seventies F-100.

Obviously this horse has been

flogged beyond repair.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I love how you brought so many farm sounds to life here! It’s not quite as quiet as some might expect, is it? Thank you so much for sharing this!

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Love it! As one who had a dad who was cleanly working on cars, trucks, etc those are familiar sounds indeed!

Keith Aron's avatar

As an early seventies model myself, I felt for the F-100 (and also for you, hearing its near-death rattle over and over).

B W Bruso's avatar

They got it running yesterday and it only made it to “almost” the top of the eighth of a mile driveway. Not sure about its future.

Keith Aron's avatar

Oh wow, this poem really gives a visceral feel of the loss wrought by the tractor. "Just listen for emerald singing and the thick, brown silence." Beautiful blending of senses in the whole poem, but especially this line, which hit me right in the gut. Here's what your prompt drew out of me:

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The joyful sounds

live in the layers between

hustle and bustle.

Beneath the constant kerfuffle

that drives the markets higher and

the wildlife into traffic and

all of us slowly but surely

into a siren song of panic.

But if you are patient and if

your heart is hospitable,

you will hear

the wind whispering

to the green summer leaves

the trilling of frogs

the buzzing of bees

a multitude of birds calling,

singing, percussing on trees

crickets pulsing in the weeds.

You will know you’ve tuned in

to the right frequency

when, in the resonance

you remember

that nothing else matters,

things are not as they seem

and your hospitable heart

beats steady and peaceful.

Joyful, glad, free.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

I love this, Keith - the idea that the tuning into hear nature’s sounds tunes us to the frequency of what really matters.

Keith Aron's avatar

Thanks, friend. I was really tuning in as I walked yesterday with your prompt on my mind. As I walked and listened, it was like layers of subtle sound revealed themselves, which then led all my senses to open and the joy to kick in. A gift!

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

“..your hospitable heart beats steady and peaceful. Joyful, glad, free “. Beautiful words

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

Oh wow, I really needed "nothing else matters" today -- thank you, Keith!

Keith Aron's avatar

So glad - I must have channeled that line just for you (not really, it was at least for me, too...I really needed to feel that when I did).

Chuck's avatar

Kerfuffle.....

..heh heh heh..

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

Oh, I love this. Those first lines really drew me in and set the tone.

Keith Aron's avatar

Thanks, A. So glad to hear this :))

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

I decided to come out into the damp humid evening and lie in my damp porch hammock before I go and get cleaned up for the night. It’s been raining and I thought it was cleaning up but then it started up again. I love rain. Always have. And I use the term summer storm because for all intents and purposes it’s summertime here.

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The raindrops are still falling

The storm has all but passed

Though the rumble of the thunder can still be heard.

.

The sun thought the rain was over

And appeared in time to set

Puddles on the ground reflect the light.

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The birds resume their singing

In the time that they have left

Before the evening fully turns to night.

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And still the rain keeps falling

Not ready to give up

The remnants of an evening summer storm.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

This pulls me right into all the sensations of a summer storm! Rain is one of my favorite sounds.

Keith Aron's avatar

I can feel this, can smell the rain. Something about your poem really soothes, Karri. I love this pair of lines especially: "The sun thought the rain was over/and appeared in time to set."

Chuck's avatar

Not ready to give up.

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

This is so lovely, like a sweet little vignette.

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

"The emerald singing and the thick, brown silence" is such a stunning line. I really struggled this one so I wrote about an imagined (maybe?) sound.

Do the ants hear

the creaking of a peony

as the petals slowly spread open

at the head of their hefty blooms,

always under threat of toppling, understanding the stakes laid

at their base, and deigning to rest

against their better judgement?

So much energy goes into

performing their show

that by the end of it, they can't

even hold themselves up.

So beautiful, aren't they?

Yet so pitiful.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

This is so lovely, A! I love the idea of peonies creaking and performing the sobering turn in the poem when they “can’t even hold themselves up.” I’m afraid I occasionally play the part of the peony - more in the past than in the present, thankfully!

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

Me, too! Maybe that's why I feel for them so much.

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Reading this I realized how much I did not know about peonies! Fascinating look into this flower

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

I've been trying to learn more about the plants and birds around our house this year. My husband recognized the peony before I did because his grandmother used to have one. This is our third year here and the first time she's been properly tended - since we moved in, at least.

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

It’s so funny that after I read your poem a friend on FB posted she had cut some peonies to bring in because they were so heavy and dragging the ground outside!

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

It's worse after rain, and we got some just as our first blossom was opening, so we got a couple small stakes to hold them up. I brought that one inside after a couple of days anyway, though.

Keith Aron's avatar

This is delightful (and wistful), A...I love the idea of the ants hearing the peony creaking...and "the head of their hefty blooms/always under threat of toppling" describes so well the plight of the peony. Peonies have always struck me as almost too rich, too decadent to fully take in...the weight, the perfume, the density of all those amazing petals.

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

I love the micro world you bring us into here, A -- you have a real knack for that. The "creaking of a peony" -- yes! And I love the bigger place you take us to at the end. It was a cool twist -- I was at first admiring the peony for throwing themselves so fully into "the show," but then caught myself with your closing line. I vow not to be a peony.

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

It's not their fault, of course! They were cultivated that way. And I still admire the beauty of the one we discovered in our yard this year! But I've been finding that I feel sorry for them, too.

Rebekah Jensen's avatar

I am blown away by this beautiful and heartbreaking poem! "Emerald singing / and the thick, brown silence" -- double oof to that.

There was no way I could not write about you-know-what with this kind of a prompt. Tee-hee!

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Because I am obsessed with birds,

I wake not to generic song

but to people I know.

I draw them into my dreams,

write roles for them.

The western tanager is a lover.

He chirrups gently in my ear to say

coffee’s on.

The warbling vireo is an artist

and a loner, and

the one I secretly want.

The yellow-rumped warbler is

sometimes a dark-eyed junco,

but only when he starts singing

way too early, and I am

that dumb.

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This is a June kind of magic.

Lisa Jensen's avatar

“The warbling vireo is an artist /and a loner, and / the one I secretly want.” I love this! Thank you for letting us into your secret.

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

What a charming description of your avian friends!

Keith Aron's avatar

Your anthropomorphized bird companions are whimsical and charming, Rebekah. Thanks for this June magic, which leaves me with a smile :))

A. Wilder Westgate (she/they)'s avatar

I love how you really bring birds to life here. Absolutely magic.

Karri Temple Brackett's avatar

Emerald singing and the thick brown silence. Such imagery from those sounds. Or lack there of.

Chuck's avatar

crickets...Crickets..CRICKETS.....

ARRGHHH 🤪

Lisa Jensen's avatar

Haha I’m sorry to bring up auch a painful subject for you, Chuck!