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Hans Jorgensen's avatar

We are playing a lot with the metaphors of rocks and water this fall in Minnesota, too. Wonderful and rich poetry here. Thanks.

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you, Hans! Rocks + water is such an incredibly evocative combination, isn't it? Whoever/whatever created this earth did a pretty good job.

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Corie Feiner's avatar

Yes, it is!

Aren't metaphors magical?

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Kristi Joy Rimbach's avatar

Much more powerful with the last stanza! Thank you for sharing your process, I always find it so interesting to hear how others write.

For me when something is complete (and honestly I rarely feel that way😅) it feels like the last puzzle piece has been put in place.

Congratulations on your book! Can’t wait to read it😊

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, Kristi - and I would love to hear your thoughts on the book! Your puzzle piece analogy feels perfect. There is definitely this sense for me of things clicking into place and some bigger picture suddenly being clear.

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Corie Feiner's avatar

I love the last stanza, too!

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much, Corie!

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Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

That final stanza is so satisfying.

This moment is like a yardstick that is too short to measure the thing you need measuring. You imagine a measuring tape and how much easier the job would be if you only had it, but all you have is this yardstick. So you keep trying to make it work, frustrated and maybe a bit angry at the tool, though it's not the tool's fault that it's not the one you really need. That metaphor actually worked much better than I expected.

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Ooooh, this is a great metaphor, Melanie!

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Corie Feiner's avatar

"Do you know what I mean

when I say

I want to be

shattered, too? "

Yes, I do!

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

It is always so lovely to find a kindred spirit! ❤️

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Keith Aron's avatar

Congrats to you and the Madsens, friend! And I loved your poem both pre-and-post-revision. 💖

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you so much!! I’ll get a copy in the mail to you soon-ish!

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Jae J Casella's avatar

The third stanza and the last **chef’s kiss voila!

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Thank you, Jae! 💕

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Rebecca C.'s avatar

To answer the poem’s poignant question: yes, yes I do.

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Of course you do, darling! 💜

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LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

I want a signed copy, please! 🙏

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Well then have one you shall! I’ll send you a DM.

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

I almost asked about signed copies, but in my excitement, I already ordered mine! More of a reason to hope for opportunities to meet in person, I suppose! 🧡

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Lisa Jensen's avatar

Let’s definitely make that happen! ❤️

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

Please!

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